Saturday, June 11, 2011

Let's Play "Pick That Logline"

Hello peeps.  We need your help. 

We can't write it alone! Please vote!
As some of you know, a couple years ago Poker Chick decided that she should write a screenplay.  Now, take a minute to control your laughter, and keep reading when you've gotten it together.  A year or so later (and no less than 20 drafts), she completed a screenplay.  After reaching this life accomplishment she decided it was good enough that she should actually get it produced.

Now get the rest of the chuckles out and put them aside for a minute because we're asking for serious help.

As we await several rejections in July (gotta love insecurity), it has come to our attention that while the screenplay is quite good, the one or two sentence summary required to sell it could use some work.  To that, Poker Chick says:

Well, DUH!  If we were any good at concisely summarizing an idea in three lines or less would we have written a 118-page document!  So can we write a good summary? We should think not!  If we could, we'd be off getting paid to write :30 commercials.  Or other peeps' loglines.

Apparently the only way to create a decent logline is to get some help.  Cue you peeps.

So please, even if you've never commented on our blog before, if you could vote now, that would be faboo.  If you can forward along to friends for comment, that would be even more faboo.  In fact, the more strangers, the better.

If you're new to this business, we could give you all kinds of links on how to "write a killer logline" and all the rules people get paid a lot of money to print out.  We say use just one rule: does it make you want to read more?  Using that criteria, which of the below sucks least?

Below is a list of potential loglines.  Some of these were seriously considered at some point, some intentionally bad.  So if you see one so bad you can't believe we wrote it, just tell yourself we wanted it that way to throw you.  Uh, yeah,  that's it.
  1. An accidental death sends a NY yuppie to Vegas with her freewheeling brother, 65-year old hippie cousin, and a random guy named Kenny. 
  2. Meet Danny Katz, a conformist yuppie NY businesswoman.  Meet her estranged family: Goldenboy, her reckless reckless and vain yet strangely charming metrosexual brother.  Meet Hal, an ancient free spirit who lives in a van.  Feel guilty for laughing at Danny's torment as she is forced to travel to Las Vegas with her estranged family in search of some fabled family coins and a random guy named Kenny.                                                             
  3. A conformist yuppie businesswoman is forced to go to Las Vegas with her estranged family in search of some fabled family coins and a random guy named Kenny.
  4. Meet Danny, a conformist yuppie businesswoman.  Watch in twisted amusement as she is forced to go to Las Vegas in search of some fabled family coins…where she has to eventually decide between saving her estranged family and keeping her job. 
  5. A young man is a reformed gambler who must return to playing big stakes poker to help a friend pay off loan sharks. 
  6. When her professional poker-playing father suddenly dies and leaves her in charge of his will, a stuck-up businesswoman must risk her career to travel to Las Vegas with her bizarre and embarrassing family to collect his valuable coins before the IRS finds them...and before her boss finds out she's gone.
  7. When her father suddenly dies and leaves her in charge of his will, a businesswoman must risk her career to travel to Las Vegas with her bizarre and embarrassing family.  After they gamble away all her money on a seat in the World Series of Poker she has to decide whether to play for the sake of her family – or lose her precious job.
  8. Condolence call is a dark comedy that follows a hard working businesswoman as she handles her estranged father's death, reconnects with her family, and places her life on the line to help her brother by playing in the World Series of Poker. 
Oh, and if you picked #5, then pick another.  
That's the logline for Rounders.

 A girl's gotta weed out the spam somehow, is all we're sayin'. 

6 comments:

Wendy said...

#6

A Mountain Momma said...

I like number 7. I fInd idea that she has to play poker intriguing.
Is this why you are called poker chick? Or do you just love poker? Or, there are other dirty options.

Poker Chick said...

Thanks guys!

Mountain Momma - no correlation, have always loved poker hence the blog name. Screenplay is fictional but did want to write about poker so that's the only tie.

Please forward - need more votes!

Wendi said...

As someone who did her time in Hollywood, I go with #7.

Anonymous said...

I'm somewhere between 6 and 7, though #3 is nice and tight and could be perfect if you add adjectives about the family besides "estranged."

Anonymous said...

I also think 7. The brother sounds like a douche.